It wouldn’t work. It was clear after I got the email notification of the first posting of the first stanza of torn corners & confetti that tweaking was required.
The whole stanza was reproduced in the email, and it didn’t look at all like it should. It was chunky and clunky and just plain ugly. Written poetry is meant to be seen as well as read. Spoken poetry is meant to be heard. Form is important either way. What to do?
Idea: explain some of the creative process that went into the poem with each of the seven remaining stanzas? Worth a try. torn corners & confetti grew out of A Room in Antwerp by Laure-Anne Bosselaar; you will find that poem here. More next time.
Here’s torn corners & confetti (ii):
torn corners & confetti (ii)
a poem in eight parts
by punkie
dust covers the windows
of your mind
thick and gray
drawn then stuck
to the pains and joys
it sits, then settles
until you forget
it’s there.
© Susan Macaulay 2015. I invite you to share this link widely, but please do not reprint or reblog or copy and paste my poems into other social media without my permission. Thank you.
I always click through to the site so didn’t even notice. Looking forward to ii through viii!
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Missed part one. Went back to it after reading this. This is compellingly beautiful and scary. Looking forward to the remainder.
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Oh! I’m glad you like it. I hope you enjoy the rest as well — let me know 🙂
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I agree, poems should sound right when we spoken and look right on the page as well as work as a poem. Yours is working totally!
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Yay!
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